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Competition Showcase – MY CHARLOTTE by Elizabeth Barclay

 

About Elizabeth Barclay
Elizabeth Barclay is a Classroom Assistant in Dalgety Bay, Fife, Scotland. ‘I have been writing short stories and verse for most of my life - since the age of nine.’ She says
‘Many years ago, in my late teens, I had two stories and lots of verse published in the now defunct Loving Magazine (IPC magazines). I have had nothing published since, until now, and I have had loads of rejections.
‘I was a member of a WEA writing group some time back and it was great. But the group disbanded due to lack of members. Possibly I will join up with another group in time. Meanwhile I read Writers’ News and Writers Magazine avidly to help me along.
‘Being runner-up in this competitionhas given me a boost and I hope to build on it by achieving more publications in the future.’

MY CHARLOTTE
By Elizabeth Barclay

My little girl is an angel. So well behaved and good natured. She's pretty too. Golden curls that I brush morning and night, baby blue eyes, and a smile to melt your heart.
Charlotte is only seven and yet she has the reading age of a nine year old. Not that her snooty teacher Miss Mullan has said that. No, I worked it out for myself. I've heard her friends reading and her cousins, and I have managed to calculate that she's far ahead of them. Of course Charlotte is excellent at everything. I reckon she takes after me. Well, it wouldn't be that lazy, idle good for nothing father of hers would it? (I'm well shot of him!)
I strongly believe my Charlotte is going to be as good as, if not better than all of these child prodigies you hear about. She is definitely a genius in the making.
Anyway, I have recently decided that I am going to hire a tutor to help Charlotte reach her full potential. I told Miss Mullan at the parents’ evening last week.
‘I wouldn't be too hasty if I were you Mrs Brand,’ she cautioned. ‘It doesn't do to push children.’
What rot, I thought. I mean I have to push Charlotte, don't I, when Miss Mullan obviously isn't going to. Letting my daughter do simple adding sums and the two times table when she could easily be doing fractions and percentages. No, I am going to phone a tutor as soon as possible. I don't care what Miss Mullan says.
After all it's only right you should give your child every opportunity to achieve. Charlotte already goes to ballet, piano, tennis coaching and singing lessons. My mother, fussy biddy that she is, doesn't approve
‘The poor wee mite must be tired with all that running around,’ she warned me the other day,
‘She doesn't have enough time to play with her friends.’
‘Yes she does.’ I argued.
‘You never did all these things when you were her age,’ my mother rambled on.
Huh, perhaps I would have turned out to be a high flying executive with some glamorous job if I had. Instead I'm stuck in the local supermarket, stacking shelves two nights a week while my mother babysits Charlotte. I also do school dinners at the nearby high school since Charlotte started school. Anything to keep the wolf from the door.
Ever since Bob left me two years ago, money has been tight. Still, I am determined that Charlotte doesn't lose out. And I want her to do all the things I never did which is why she goes to these after-school activities. She is so bright. Admittedly she can be a tiny bit shy now and then. That's why I have to give her a little shove to move her on and upwards in spite of what my mother says. Mind you goodness knows how I'll find the cash for a tutor. Mother, bless her, helps me out but I can't ask her for help to pay for a tutor. I reckon a tutor must cost a fortune.
‘But of course my Charlotte's worth it.’ I found myself telling my friend Sally at the school gates the very next day. ‘I must get her a tutor at any cost. I'll manage somehow since Charlotte is so advanced she needs the extra challenge.’
Momentarily I thought I detected a sigh from Sally. Perhaps it was my imagination though because, when I looked at Sally more closely, I saw that she was smiling.
‘So have you got Charlotte's costume sorted for the School Play?’ she then went on to ask me.
Play? What play?
‘Er-em … I'll have to sort something out soon,’ I said flustered.
Sally's eyes opened wide in amazement. ‘But the first night of the play is this evening. Didn't Charlotte bring home the letter with the details? Megan brought it home ages ago.’
‘I don't remember,’ I gabbled. ‘Look Sal, I have to dash. The gas man is due at my house any minute.’
With that white lie I fled in embarrassment, face on fire.
Trembling, I reached home and sat down on the couch trying to collect my thoughts. Why, oh why, hadn't Charlotte told me about the play and where was the letter? I didn't understand. I always checked Charlotte's bag and there had been no sign of it. I was most upset. After a cup of tea I managed to calm down. There must be a reasonable explanation. Probably Charlotte had wanted to surprise me.
I was desperate for Charlotte to come home now. I hoped she wouldn't be too disappointed that I already knew about the play. Still, it meant I could help her get ready. I wondered what she was wearing. Something stunning for a starring role of course.
‘So why didn't you tell me about the play?’ I pounced as soon as she came in the door.
‘Oh Mummy...I...’ she stammered, flushing.
Poor love, she felt guilty for not telling me.
‘Don't worry,’ I gave her a hug. ‘I know you wanted to surprise me. But tell me which part have you got?’
"Um-er...’ Charlotte bit her lip.
‘It's okay,’ I smiled. She obviously still wanted to surprise me. ‘You don't have to tell me. Only, who's made your costume?’
‘Ellie's mum.’
Brilliant! Ellie's mum was a fantastic dressmaker. She must have made a beautiful outfit for my beautiful Charlotte. Something pretty, elegant and flattering.
‘Well, I'll help you get dressed,’ I announced.
‘No! We're getting changed backstage at the school hall,’ Charlotte told me.
‘Never mind. I'll see you dressed up for the first time on stage. You'll be great Charlotte. I know it. I'm so looking forward to watching you act. You'll steal the show, I'm sure. A future star. That's what you are Charlotte.’
‘I don't know...’
‘Of course you are!’ I went on. ‘It's only natural that you'll be nervous, but once you're up there in the spotlight your nerves will disappear. Anyway did you get me a ticket?’
‘It's pay at the door.’ Charlotte mumbled.
‘Go and get ready then,’ I ordered.
Charlotte left early, picked up by Ellie's mum, who was helping backstage.
I followed later and joined the throng in the school corridor queuing to get into the school hall. It was only then that I saw the poster stuck on the wall advertising the play. Or rather two little plays. Apparently the school were putting on Little Red Riding Hood and Sleeping Beauty. Excitement rose inside me as I conjured up visions of Charlotte in red or as Sleeping Beauty. Would there be any singing? I prayed there would be – my Charlotte had a lovely singing voice. As Red Riding Hood or Sleeping Beauty, singing solo, she would be excellent. I fervently hoped she was the lead role in one of these plays. If not she would probably be the prince in Sleeping Beauty or Red Riding Hood's mother. Even in these roles she would be superb.
At last the curtain rose on a colourful scene. Little Red Riding Hood. Everyone enjoyed the play and clapped enthusiastically, except me – because Charlotte wasn't in it. I honestly thought Charlotte would have been in both plays. She should have been!
‘So what part has Charlotte got in Sleeping Beauty then?’ Kate Masters (big wig on the PTA) asked me at the interval.
‘Oh, just wait and see.’ I wasn't going to tell her I didn't know. ‘You'll spot her a mile off.’
But by the end of the play I was desperate. I felt so upset and frustrated. I had craned my neck and peered relentlessly to no avail. I simply could not see my daughter anywhere on stage. She wasn't even one of the hordes of children who were playing the villagers. Surely she wasn't sick? Someone would have told me.
After the play I rushed backstage. Still no sign of Charlotte. Feeling like crying, I asked Sally's daughter Megan where Charlotte was. Megan was in the process of changing out of her starring role Sleeping Beauty outfit (that should have been my Charlotte's part).
‘I think she's on stage just now Mrs Brand. Clearing up."’
Clearing up? Whatever was Charlotte playing at?
I clambered up the stage steps and there was Charlotte surrounded by some older boys and Mr Parker, the drama coach. They were all busy moving the scenery and tidying the stage.
‘Hello Mummy.’ Charlotte turned to me beaming and paused after pulling a chair across the floor. ‘I'm a stagehand. Do you like the dungarees Ellie's mum made me? I've had a great time changing the scenery tonight.’
‘Charlotte... !’ I was just about to give Charlotte a piece of my mind, tear a strip off her, let her know how angry I was that she wasn't in the plays. But something stopped me. The happy sparkling eyes, her cheerful voice. I'm not sure. All I knew was that Charlotte was very pleased with herself. Proud even. Well then, so was I. I was very proud of Charlotte for being such a hardworking stagehand. This must be her thing.
‘Mummy, you're not angry with me, are you?’ Charlotte gazed at me anxiously.
‘Of course not Charlotte,’ I smiled ‘Far from it. I think what you've done tonight is brilliant.’
Charlotte looked relieved.
Now I must find out about technical theatre courses. I wonder what age kids can start learning that kind of thing? It's obvious you see. Charlotte is destined to be a producer or a director one day. I'm convinced of that. Probably in Hollywood or maybe even Coronation Street. That's how successful my Charlotte will be!


Judging comment
If you are going to keep up with the Joneses – and that was the theme of the short story competition in which Elizabeth Barclay’s My Charlotte won second prize – you need to be competitive. Mrs Brand, Elizabeth Barclay’s heroine, is competitive enough. But she is vicariously competitive, she envisages success in the world in terms of the achievements that her daughter Charlotte is headed for. So she does all she can to push Charlotte along.
All this success is, of course, in Mrs Brand’s imagination. So it makes sense to tell the story as an internal monologue giving her view of the world and of her plans for Charlotte. But in chasing these plans, does she push Charlotte too far? Certainly granny seems to think so, Charlotte’s teacher seems to signal the same thing, and even Mrs Brand’s peers at the school gates realise what is happening.
So Charlotte is very guarded about the school play. She knows her mum and probably knows that once her mum hears about the play she will start pushing Charlotte towards a starring role. But Charlotte doesn’t want a starring role. She wants to be a stagehand, that’s a role she enjoys. And good for her.
Her mother reacts to this situation in much the same way that a SatNav operates in your car. If you find yourself facing a serious diversion, the SatNav assesses your position and promptly plots a new route to get you where you want to be. And that’s what Mrs Brand does: she assesses the new position and plots a new route to take her towards her ambitions for Charlotte – but this time, that means Hollywood. It makes a good ending to an enjoyable story.