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Competition Showcase – Boy meets Girl by Mary Rout

 

About Mary Rout
Mary Rout is one of those whose competition win marks her very first published story: ‘I attended a short eight-week creative writing course at my local college in 1992 but, until entering this short story competition, have never entered any competitions or submitted any work for publication. I am really over the moon to have won third place at my first attempt. I hope this is a good omen. I do not belong to any writing groups but I have always had a ‘book to be written’ in my head since leaving school at sixteen.’

Boy Meets Girl

by Mary Rout



Wow, it’s dark in here!
These were his first thoughts upon waking. He waited patiently for his eyes to adjust to his surroundings.
I can hardly see a thing.
He grumbled, shifting his position.
What was that?
He bumped into something and was most surprised. He lay quite still trying to remember if there should be someone else here with him? Several minutes past and, try as he might, he just could not remember falling asleep with someone else beside him. Finally, unable to remember, he decided to take a peek to see who was here, in his personal space; with him. Maybe then he would remember something. He wriggled back and forth to try and get a better view, but it was no use; whoever they were they were snuggled up right against his back leaving him no room to manoeuvre.
There really isn’t any room in here
He snaked out his left hand behind him reaching out to try and feel what was stopping him from moving around freely.
Wow! That’s a person I can feel. I’m really not alone. There’s someone here with me and…wait…they’re moving too!
He waited until they stopped moving and then turned his head over his shoulder to sneak a look at the person next to him.
Hmm, what lovely shaped eyes they have. And those eyelashes. Wow! Thick and black like a chimney sweep’s brush.
His gaze saw each individual eyelash gently resting on pale ivory skin.
Not much hair though, but, it is dark and curly,
He noted approvingly. Next, his eyes moved back down to the face of his companion. What a sweet little button nose you’ve got. And lovely butterfly wing lips. And is that a tiny dimple I can see in your chin?
His examination progressed. With the lightest of touches his fingers brushed the exquisitely soft silky skin of the person lying next to him; stroking along the contours of their body, light as a feather until finally along the back of their hand, down long thin fingers to fingertips encased in short finger nails. His companion’s arms were crossed over their chest and their knees were pulled up tight onto their tummy. Very gently he ran a fingertip over their knee noticing the difference between bone and soft, gentle, skin. His companion stirred and stretched out revealing a soft rounded tummy and remarkably long legs.
That’s what I must have bumped into; it must have been those long legs pressed into my back that stopped me from turning over.
But he didn’t mind. It was somehow reassuring to know that he was not alone. He continued to watch his sleeping companion for several more minutes before he became sleepy again. So, settling himself comfortably down beside his companion, he closed his eyes and drifted off into a deep sleep.
She awoke with a start. What was that? she thought stubbornly, refusing to open her almond shaped eyes.
I’m sure I felt something? Yes, there it is again. What is that?
She waited, listening carefully to every sound. The steady boom, boom of a heart beating; the background noises.
Oh, no, I don’t believe this! Is that…a…
She reached out in front of her with one of her hands and met solid warm flesh.
Oooh! Her natural inquisitive nature took over. Her fingers began to dance up and down feeling, exploring.
Yes, there’s a hand…an arm…chin, nose, oops sorry didn’t mean to poke you in the eye. She waited for a shout of pain. When one didn’t come, she excitedly resumed her exploration. Lightly, her fingers continued to brush the skin of her companion; moving over their body with the lightest of touches, drawing an abstract pattern on their ivory skin. Having completed her investigations, she concluded that indeed she was not alone and, surprisingly, felt strangely comforted by the existence of another person so close by. Should she wake them up? Or would it be better to simply observe them? I wonder what they look like?
Finally she opened her eyes and allowed them the freedom to observe her companion. Her sky-blue eyes wandered over their body. They were so close together; touching each other’s bodies in the confined space that she could see the veins criss-crossing under the ivory skin of their back.
Hmm, she mused, noting that their body was almost identical to hers before, finally, allowing her eyes to rest upon their face. It was hard to see everything from her position. They were lying side by side, both facing the same way, both on their right sides. She raised her head to get a better view of her sleeping companion.
It’s not fair. They’ve got longer hair than me. It’s the same as mine, thick, curly, and dark but it’s longer and I can’t get mine to grow like that. And, they’ve got eyelashes to die for!
She wanted to shake her companion awake to complain but she resisted the urge because, at that moment, their eyes flickered slightly and their eyelashes fanned out across beautiful cheekbones like a Spanish Lady’s black lace fan and she watched, mesmerised. Her examination complete, she felt the heavy cloak of tiredness settle upon her. After all this excitement, she yawned and stretched her limbs, then settled down comfortably drifting off to peaceful sleep.
What the hell was that?
His attention grabbed by a force more powerful than he had ever felt before shook him violently.
An earthquake! It’s got to be an earthquake.
He quickly reached this decision. He and his companion were in danger. He lay absolutely still, then again a few minutes later, was pushed, and bounced around like a raft in the ocean.
We’ve got to get out of here, he decided as he began anxiously to search for a way to escape but it was still pitch black and this hampered him. He began to move, feeling his way, looking for an opening, a door, a corridor, anything leading to the outside. In his hurry he bumped heads with his companion.
They’re still asleep!
He was stunned that they could sleep through all this ruckus. But, not for long. His companion’s eyes flew open and they opened their mouth but their scream of fear was smothered by the noise and force of the next quake. Out of the corner of his eyes she saw a flash of light.
There; there’s a light. Quick follow me.
He caught hold of his companion’s wrist and purposefully went towards the light.
It seems to be down some sort of tunnel.
He stopped near the entrance and looked down. He could see the sides expand and contract with the force of the earthquake.
There isn’t room for the two of us so I’ll have to let go of them, but they must follow me. He turned to tell them what they needed to do but hesitated just for a fraction as he saw their beautiful blue eyes open wide in fear. He was about to tell them he would go first and they should follow when, before he could say anything, a ferocious force tipped him over the edge of the tunnel of darkness and, head first, he disappeared from view.
She had been glad she was not alone and had someone with her who was brave but, as she watched in silent amazement, her companion disappear from sight Paralysed with fear she huddled in a ball and resisted the violent quakes that followed; each one trying to pushed her over into the dark tunnel, just like they had with her companion.
Perhaps, if I stay very still where I am, I’ll be safe?
Stubbornly, she resisted, hoping that her companion would reappear to help her but, when he didn’t, she could resist no longer. The quakes were continuing more violently now. Bravely, she moved just enough so that she could peer over into the dark tunnel. It was pitch black and she couldn’t see her companion. He could still be down there but that was the unknown and she was scared to venture into the tunnel in case she didn’t come out. Suddenly, just like her companion, she was tipped over into the tunnel as a series of quakes hit. Down she went, stopping several times along the way with only enough time to catch her breath before being pushed further down, deeper and deeper, into the tunnel. Just when she thought she wouldn’t make it, another violent quake threw her clear of the tunnel and into daylight. Such was the force that she cried out yelling at the top of her voice, scrunching her face up, and screwing her eyes tight shut against the harsh light.
‘It’s a girl!’ the joyous greeting rang out as strong, careful, hands reached under her head and bottom lifting her up. ‘Safe and sound now. Look little one, open your eyes, and meet your brother? This little boy has been waiting to see you.”
Who were these people?
She opened her eyes and was startled to be staring into the wide awake face of her sleeping companion. He was staring back at her. Bewildered by their surroundings, they both just stared at each other. ‘A boy and a girl! Let’s introduced you properly. Liam meet Lucy. Lucy meet Liam. Congratulations, Mum you have twins!’
Liam and Lucy looked around at their new world, neither realising that they were a boy and girl bound together for all time.


Judging comment
Boy meets girl was the brief for this particular short story competition. And how very well Mary Rout interpreted the theme. She obviously recognised that many entries for this competition would be love stories at various levels. So she cast her boy and girl in very different roles: they are new-born babies just coming into the world.
Of course, we don’t realise who they are, what age they are, or where they are until the very end of the story. And it is a tribute to Mary Rous’s storytelling skills that she holds our interest and attention without having to reveal too much too early.